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Hi, Can someone review the below e-mail and make any suggestions/comments on how to improve the flow of the e-mail?

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Hi Darren,

I've been working on the Related Party Reconciliation and I am still continuing to understand and learn about the activity that is posted to this account for the off balance sheet pools. I've attached the Reconciliation as of January including a summary of instructions (which is still work in progress). In reviewing the reconciliation you will notice that I have two line items for other activity. One line is other activity as of December 31, 2008 and the other activity is for the current year. I will need to research in detail the other activity as of December.

In order to complete this reconciliation there are different reports that are needed from Treasury Department to obtain contract details of the entries posted to the account.

The below is a summary of the various transactions that are posted to each Pool's Related Party Account:

 TS/MP entries posted by DG/Sun interface: detail is obtained from running crystal reports for each pool for the following: 1) Cash Accounts, 2) Interest Account, 3) Mortgage Receivable Accounts, and 4) A/R Accounts
 Mtg Adj wire transfers and VDI wire transfers posted by Cash Team: detail is obtained from Mortgage Bank Adjustment Transaction Report (MTGH1040) sent by Michael in Treasury.
o The Mtg Adj and VDI wire postings also includes the following: 1) wire for the movement of funds related to liquidations and substitutions (detail is obtained from report sent by Treasury , 2) wire for payment of prior month fees, and 2)Cash Collection.
 Pool transfers posted by me: detail is obtained from taking the change in combined balance from the current month vs. prior month in the MTGHB104 report and the current month activity for Mortgage Receivable by running crystal reports
 Prior month Interest due posted by JP: detail is obtained from Liq All Treasury Report.

I will start going back to reconciling the prior months to see what contracts are truly outstanding. This will take some time.

Thanks.

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Hi Darren,

I've been working on the Related Party Reconciliation. I am still attempting to understand the activity posted to this account for the off balance sheet pools. I've attached the Reconciliation as of January including a summary of instructions (which is still work in progress). In ...

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