Discussing Childhood Obesity

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Without further lecturing, please let me provide you the basic guidelines of writing an academic essay. With the following guidelines provided, I am sure you have a better grasp at completing this current assignment which just needs one more draft to finish.

Here're some very valuable sources you can try to evaluate (by following that document your professor provided). I can only go as far as researching secondary sources for you to help you save time on this part. If you do end up needing time to write an essay for this topic, I have also included a SAMPLE (for reference only) essay for you under the following "Attach Files" section from the responses of this posting.

Secondary Source #1~
http://aspe.hhs.gov/health/reports/child_obesity/

Source #2~http://kidshealth.org/parent/general/body/overweight_obesity.html

Source #3~http://www.latimes.com/topic/health/physical-conditions/obesity-HEDAI0000057.topic
[You should most definitely read through this article for this is a Journal article since it was provided by L.A. Times.]

Source #4~http://www.rwjf.org/childhoodobesity/ [This site has to do with a charity type of an organization that helps fight childhood obseity.]

Source #5~http://www.telegraph.co.uk/health/healthnews/8599452/Television-creates-perfect-storm-of-childhood-obesity.html [This was another News article from a British newspaper that you should check into.]

Source #6~http://www.nlm.nih.gov/medlineplus/obesityinchildren.html [This source comes from a government based website which is very reliable.]

Source #7~http://seattletimes.nwsource.com/html/localnews/2015297856_kidobesity12m.html?prmid=4749
[This was another News/Journal article for you from a different state newspaper.]

Introduction Paragraph~
The writer should be letting the readers (professors and other peer readers such as me) know what the intention of writing this essay is. Some quotes are expected as well as a thesis statement at the end of this particular paragraph. Please see attached revised draft for future reference. (If not treated or prevented properly, obesity that exists from a person's childhood to adulthood can lead to serious health problems which can take place in the physical, emotional, and environmental aspects of one's life.) [This is my suggestion for you based on your submitted version, of course; I didn't change the meaning of what you wrote originally but just the wording of the sentence]. I think you should keep the thesis this way. [These were my direct comments from the following sample paper which I have edited previously. This section is only helpful if you actually have to write an essay in this topic.] {This is just another example of a working thesis statement, but please use the later one I provided in the attached document!!!}

First Body Paragraph~
Topic Sentence should be about the ...