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Eliminating Faulty Parallelism.

Revise the following sentences to eliminate any faulty parallelism
Example:
Newlywed couples need to learn to communicate effectively and budget in a wise manner.
**Revised:
Newlywed couples need to learn to communicate effectively and budget wisely.
1. Impressionism is a term that applies primarily to an art movement of the late nineteenth century, but the music of some composers of the era is also considered impressionist.
2. The early impressionists include Eduardo Manet, Claude Monet, and Mary Cassatt, and also among them are Edgar degas and Camille Pissarro.
3. Impressionist composers include Claude Debussy, and Maurice Ravel is considered an impressionist also.
4. Just as impressionism in art challenged accepted conventions of color and line, in music the challenge from impressionism was to accept conventions of for and harmony.
5. Critics at first condemned both impressionist artists and impressionist music.
6. Women impressionist painter included Mary Cassatt from the United States and Berth Morisot, who was French.
7. Among Monnet's goals were to observe the changing effects of light and color on a landscape and record his observations quickly.
8. To accomplish these goals he would often create not just one but a series of paintings of a subject over the course of a day.

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1. Impressionism is a term that applies primarily to an art movement of the late nineteenth century, but the music of some composers of the era is also considered impressionist.
*revision* The term "impressionism" applies primarily to a late nineteenth century art movement but can also describe a style of music.
2. The early impressionists include Eduardo Manet, Claude Monet, and Mary Cassatt, and also among them are Edgar degas and Camille Pissarro.
*revision* Eduardo Manet, Claude Monet, and Mary Cassatt ...

Solution Summary

In the solution to this problem, I revise the sentences given to eliminate faulty parallelism.

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