This posting offers help with writing short criticism to these email messages:
As much as I would like to, I must decline your request that I give your membership a free lectures next month. I receive many requests to give free lectures. I grant some of them, but I simply cannot do them all. Unfortunately, yours is one that I must decline. I regret that I cannot serve in future, please call on me.
As you create your criticism points about the following emails, please allow these ideas to help you:
#1. Please note that the opening salutation is informal or abrupt. It does not add a "Dear" or even a comma, ...
This posting provides hints about email critiques.